Thank you for your interest in the game! Your application has been reviewed, and we would like to request some revisions in the following areas:
Booker's personality section reads a little more like a summary of game events than a description of the character. You don't need to edit anything existing, but please add more to elaborate on what he's like independent of Elizabeth in his day-to-day interactions. It's something you begin to describe in the last two paragraphs but don't expound upon.
If you have any questions or would like any sort of clarification on what we would like to see, please don't hesitate to ask! Revisions should be either edited into the existing application in a different font color or in a comment as a response to this revision request.
REVISIONS
Thank you for your interest in the game! Your application has been reviewed, and we would like to request some revisions in the following areas:
Booker's personality section reads a little more like a summary of game events than a description of the character. You don't need to edit anything existing, but please add more to elaborate on what he's like independent of Elizabeth in his day-to-day interactions. It's something you begin to describe in the last two paragraphs but don't expound upon.
If you have any questions or would like any sort of clarification on what we would like to see, please don't hesitate to ask! Revisions should be either edited into the existing application in a different font color or in a comment as a response to this revision request.
Thank you again for your interest.