First off, we are incredibly sorry for the lateness of this reply - it's been rather difficult to get any solid group of mods on at a time, and since we need a majority to vote on the applications, these have been sitting too long, so we apologize for the long wait!
Now.
Thank you for your interest in the game! Your application has been reviewed, and we would like to request some revisions in the following areas:
While we recognise that Baby Doll is at times mostly a vehicle by which the plot moves forward, the personality section provided reads almost more like a summary of the film than a personality section outright. While we did get an over all feel for the character, we would prefer a section that feels a little bit more cleaned up - stating examples is fine (and encouraged!), but perhaps rather than running down the list of events and pointing out which of her personality traits is shown there, it would feel more cohesive as a personality rather than a history if we were given a run down of the various traits Baby Doll begins with and develops, and then those instances where this can be seen.
If you have any questions or would like any sort of clarification on what we would like to see, please don't hesitate to ask!
REVISIONS + APOLOGY
First off, we are incredibly sorry for the lateness of this reply - it's been rather difficult to get any solid group of mods on at a time, and since we need a majority to vote on the applications, these have been sitting too long, so we apologize for the long wait!
Now.
Thank you for your interest in the game! Your application has been reviewed, and we would like to request some revisions in the following areas:
While we recognise that Baby Doll is at times mostly a vehicle by which the plot moves forward, the personality section provided reads almost more like a summary of the film than a personality section outright. While we did get an over all feel for the character, we would prefer a section that feels a little bit more cleaned up - stating examples is fine (and encouraged!), but perhaps rather than running down the list of events and pointing out which of her personality traits is shown there, it would feel more cohesive as a personality rather than a history if we were given a run down of the various traits Baby Doll begins with and develops, and then those instances where this can be seen.
If you have any questions or would like any sort of clarification on what we would like to see, please don't hesitate to ask!
Thank you again for your interest.